The time is suitably ripe,
To set ablaze the pyre.
My eyes are moist which I tend to wipe,
And hope that the consequences are not dire.
“What had gone wrong?”
I ask thyself bewilderedly.
Alas! There was no harmony left in the song;
This compelled me to make amends dissentingly.
Priorities came into forth at an early stage;
Their curious assortment had its own role to play.
With much difficulty I extricate myself from the cage;
To unleash a new ME and eventually call it a day.
What an amazing poem! I'm glad that I'm the first one to comment. Bedit, please write more poems.
ReplyDeleteLoved the climax lines and thoughts .. hope you do find satisfaction with this creative outlet :)
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Nicee!
ReplyDeleteloved it :D
ReplyDeleteAwesome poem. Loved it to the core. Bedit, you are a Rockstar!
ReplyDeleteLoved it!
ReplyDeleteThe poem is truly amazing. I could relate to it very much. The verses touch your heart. Keep writing!
ReplyDeleteBeautiful creations!!! :):) keep writing!
ReplyDeleteNice, like the end particularly
ReplyDeleteAwesome :)
ReplyDeletenice one !!
ReplyDeleteLike!
ReplyDeletenice... i like it... keep it up with good work..
ReplyDeletevery nice. emotions is dripping in the lines.liked it.
ReplyDeletewow!! u rock!!i've never seen any lines marinated with so much emotions and sentiments( not 2 mention the good vocub) b4 this.good work amateur shakespeare!!!!!!
ReplyDeletelovely....loved it...
ReplyDelete:) Nice one
ReplyDeletenice lines dude!
ReplyDeleteIts Ayush !!!
ReplyDeleteStupendous utilization of words. Never seen such great use of words before. There is a long way to go my friend. Thumbs up for u and always be!! :-)
beautifully written Bedit.. i think there is some kind of unknown element ..not all is explained and that is beautiful.. Mitali.
ReplyDeleteAwesome Bedit!
ReplyDeleteWhat an intoxicating mix of words and feelings! I'm truly impressed. Have you published your poems? The whole world needs to have a look at them. Post more poems asap. Please please.
ReplyDeleteNice it is :) Esp the ending.
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The best poem I've read in recent times and I mean it from the bottom of my heart. The poem has a unique subtlety to it. Can I get you autograph, Sir? Will keep it as a memoir. I'm your FAN for life. Cheers to PRECEDENCE!
ReplyDeleteI related to the feelings ... It's that time when you have so much to do that sleep alludes you and clear thinking ! :-)
ReplyDeleteEmotional O_o
ReplyDeleteIn awe of the lyrical poem. One of your best works. Please compose more poems and make us all happy. You are a ROCKSTAR!
ReplyDeletereally nice
ReplyDeleteWow, beautiful poem mate. Thanks for sharing and keep them coming!
ReplyDeleteVery nice... liked it ... keep posting :)
ReplyDeletenice...break free...your lines have a very nice flow to them...
ReplyDeleteLoved reading it. Good one.
ReplyDeleteRise from ashes! :)
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