The reply comes quick "Nope".
It was tough for me to cope;
I looked around for a rope.
Life seemed to be mere;
But at the pinnacle, it was so dear.
Later, I changed gear;
Which took me into the rear.
I had a whirlpool in my mind,
Which helped me to find.
That life was so kind,
And I completely blind.
Nice :)
ReplyDeletevery nice and precise! :)
ReplyDeleteI am a fauji and all words in this post have been part of my daily life - conflict, hope, nope, cope, rope, pinnacle, gear, rear; whirlpool of mind, find, kind, blind and finally "Am I happy"??? In my case I have found the mantra of my happiness - my wife and kids have to be happy for me to be happy. Nice read but I think 12 lines are too short, suggest add minimum 8 more lines.
ReplyDeleteWonderful creation buddy, keep it up :)
ReplyDeleteGreat going, Bedit. The choice of words is simply fab.
ReplyDeleteWhat a poem !! It blew my mind off. Can I have your autograph?
ReplyDeleteSimple words. Great emotions. Lovely rhymes.
ReplyDeleteAll the ingredients for a super poem.
Let me tell you, you are the BEST...
Such refreshing writing.
ReplyDeletePlease take up poetry as your profession.
Keep writing.
nice!!!
ReplyDeleteSo sweet!!!
ReplyDeleteA question of ages: Do people who were born blind, see dreams ?
ReplyDeleteI mean, people who were born blind never saw anything, so how can they dream ? They don't differ colors or anything. Do you think they dream at night ?
Perfect :-) What we all need to know about life.
ReplyDeletecrisp and soothing..
ReplyDeleteGood one, deep thought, from top to bottom and back up! The roller coaster of life in 12 lines!
ReplyDeleteMind-blowing poem. Congratulations for all the accolades. Waiting for your next poem.
ReplyDeleteNice post dude !!
ReplyDeletekya kavita hai ;) iss kavita to har kisike andar ka baat keh gyi... Nice post bhai :)
ReplyDeleteit seems this poem is based on my life
ReplyDeletesounds sweet re.....
ReplyDeleteThe above poem is a lovely rendition. No second thoughts about that.
ReplyDeleteAll and sundry faces conflicts in our daily lives. The poem explains the dilemma we go through.
ReplyDeleteIt's a fascinating poem. Loved the way you ended it. You are so talented, dear.
ReplyDeletesuperb use of words.....way to go buddy!!!
ReplyDeleteitz a good one, better than your previous all, u r improving day by day, best of luck
ReplyDeleteAwe-inspiring poem. Poetry at its best. You rock, Bedit.
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