Aren't we all aware?
All around there is a fuss;
Here I come, beware!
Where is the dearth?
Have we forsaken our very soul?
The quest goes on for a ‘justified’ birth;
Hence, uplift ourselves to reach the goal.
The answer lies in our very existence,
Quite intricate to unravel;
Let’s undo whatever is tense,
And entrust our acumen to marvel.
Fantastic writing. You are a poet to watch out for. Keep it up !! :)
ReplyDeleteAmazing poem. Made me feel very emotional. Nice use of metaphors as well. Loved it.
ReplyDeleteBedit, this is you BIGGEST fan here. A long wait comes to an end. And HOW! Such a lyrical poem. I am stunned. Please write some more, soon...
ReplyDeleteExcellent one. Too good. You are one gifted poet, that's for sure.
ReplyDeleteSerene rendition. The choice of words is unprecedented. Good job!
ReplyDeleteWonderful poem, quite inspiring and loved the way you've penned it down.
ReplyDeletebeautiful and inspiring ...thank you x
ReplyDeleteah this is a beautiful verse....wonderful rhythm that exudes the peace of the message...
ReplyDeleteLovely work!
ReplyDeleteKeep writing.
Great work
ReplyDeleteAwesome! Fascinating as always... Your poems rock!
ReplyDeleteAMAZED. I DIDNT KNOW U WRITE ALSO. AND THAT TOO LIKE THIS. THANKS DEAR. KP IT UP :)
ReplyDeleteWhat a poem, man. I am dumbfounded. You have such keen eye to detail. Inspiring!
ReplyDeleteA wonderful poem.
ReplyDeleteVery thought provoking. The subtle way in which it impacts you impressed me the most. Looking forward to your next poem now.
ReplyDeleteThank you for sharing - I like the change of pace across the stanzas. You are mixing meter while pretty much maintaining ABAB throughout. I look forward to reading more :)
ReplyDeleteLove this. My favorite: "have we forsaken our very soul?" Sometimes I wonder if some people (especially politicians nowadays) have done that. You know?
ReplyDeletePoetry is soothing and I just experienced it. Thank you so much, Bedit the poet.
ReplyDeleteThe best things in life are thoroughly enjoyable! And so was your poem. Short, sweet and sublime!
ReplyDeleteYour last stanza is awesome!!! The rhythm and the rhyme.
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