Thursday, November 8, 2012

From Within: A Parable

The sense lies in us,
Aren't we all aware?
All around there is a fuss;
Here I come, beware!

Where is the dearth?
Have we forsaken our very soul?
The quest goes on for a ‘justified’ birth;
Hence, uplift ourselves to reach the goal.

The answer lies in our very existence,
Quite intricate to unravel;
Let’s undo whatever is tense,
And entrust our acumen to marvel.

20 comments:

  1. Fantastic writing. You are a poet to watch out for. Keep it up !! :)

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  2. Amazing poem. Made me feel very emotional. Nice use of metaphors as well. Loved it.

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  3. Bedit, this is you BIGGEST fan here. A long wait comes to an end. And HOW! Such a lyrical poem. I am stunned. Please write some more, soon...

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  4. Excellent one. Too good. You are one gifted poet, that's for sure.

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  5. Serene rendition. The choice of words is unprecedented. Good job!

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  6. Wonderful poem, quite inspiring and loved the way you've penned it down.

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  7. beautiful and inspiring ...thank you x

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  8. ah this is a beautiful verse....wonderful rhythm that exudes the peace of the message...

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  9. Awesome! Fascinating as always... Your poems rock!

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  10. AMAZED. I DIDNT KNOW U WRITE ALSO. AND THAT TOO LIKE THIS. THANKS DEAR. KP IT UP :)

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  11. What a poem, man. I am dumbfounded. You have such keen eye to detail. Inspiring!

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  12. Very thought provoking. The subtle way in which it impacts you impressed me the most. Looking forward to your next poem now.

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  13. Thank you for sharing - I like the change of pace across the stanzas. You are mixing meter while pretty much maintaining ABAB throughout. I look forward to reading more :)

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  14. Love this. My favorite: "have we forsaken our very soul?" Sometimes I wonder if some people (especially politicians nowadays) have done that. You know?

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  15. Poetry is soothing and I just experienced it. Thank you so much, Bedit the poet.

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  16. The best things in life are thoroughly enjoyable! And so was your poem. Short, sweet and sublime!

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  17. Your last stanza is awesome!!! The rhythm and the rhyme.

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